The pie charts below show how general household costs were broken down in a certain city in both 2017 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show how general household costs were broken down in a certain city in both 2017 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate how much people spent on general
household
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expenses in a particular town in the years 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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, it is evident that the amount of spending on entertainment and food increased in 2018;
whereas
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, people spent less on accommodation and schooling.
However
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, spending on rent or house purchasing was the largest expense in both years. Notably,
household
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bills' costs remained steady. Spending on rent or house purchasing was the biggest expense in 2017, which was 32%;
however
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,
this
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declined slightly to 25% in 2018. Despite
this
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decline, spending on accommodation was still the largest
household
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cost in 2018. Schooling ranked as the second biggest 
household
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expenditure at 22% and decreased marginally to 18% in 2018. Meanwhile, people spent more on entertainment and groceries, increasing from 10% to 15% and 18% to 24%, respectively.
Therefore
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, spending on groceries became the second largest expenditure in 2018. Eventually,
household
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bills had the same percentage in both years, which was 18%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words household with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • portion
  • accounted for
  • largest segment
  • percentage
  • notable increase
  • dedicated to
  • remained relatively stable
  • highlighting consistency
  • expenses decreased
  • shift in spending priorities
  • remained constant
  • illustrating no significant change
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