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Some people think paying taxes is a big enough contribution to their society, while others think people have more responsibilities as members of society than only paying taxes. Discuss both these views and give your opinion:

#people #taxes #contribution #society #responsibilities #members
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In order to the requirements of each society, governments need to earn money and
one
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 of the significant methods for
this
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, is paying
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tax
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taxes
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. Some
of
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the
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citizens believe the
tax
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 burden is the main
asisst
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aspect
to
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of
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 society
in contrast
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,
some
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others believe they are more
reponsibil
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responsible
 than just
payinng
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paying
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taxes
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tax
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. In my
view
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view,
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 persons have several duties to get some public governmental services
with
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by
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 paying
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tax
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taxes
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 and they have
meny
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many
 responsibilities. The majority of
persons
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people
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 believe
thet
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that
 paying
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tax
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taxes
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 is
one
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 of the important their
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residents
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resident's
residents'
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diuties
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duties
 and they have some other major tasks to do
for having
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to have
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 a better society.
Although
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 the people of each
counties
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county
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 require
somes equipments
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some equipment
 and facilities, these are not free and they should pay the cost of these services as
tax
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. In Iran, we monthly pay a particular part of our salary as the
tax
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 and it will
spend
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be spent
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for
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on
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 some
serivces
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services
 like our transportation, bills, cleaning the streets and …
for example
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.
In addition
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,
this
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 method can
halp
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help
 to
co_oprate
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cooperate
 between people
nad
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and
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government
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the government
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.
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 the number of
residents
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 that believe
thay
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they
 have duties more than paying the
tax
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are
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is
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 undeniable, there are some others thinking that
burden
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the burden
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taxe
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tax
 is as enough as their responsibilities for their societies and they should not do any activities and
pey
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pay
 more for their habitat. They think every
services
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service
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 that they
recive
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receive
 is
paied
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paid
 by their burden taxes.
According to
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this
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behavior
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behavior,
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 the governments can not resolve some of the problems because they do not have enough budget in some conditions.
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example
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 if some
the
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residents
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 of the countries do not pay the cost of their own taxes
regurarly
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regularly
 many parts of that community will
mot
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not
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 solve those
populations
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population's
populations'
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 problems because of money. Because they deny
peying
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paying
tax
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 is
one
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 of the essential
halps
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helps
 that
residents
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 can do.
Finally
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,
while
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the
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a
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 considerable number of people accept the
tax
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 as the
necssary taskes
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necessary task
 for
improve
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improving
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 the facilities in communities, some others refuse
this
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 and believe that the amount of
tax
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 is enough. I think paying
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tax
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taxes
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 is
one
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 of
the
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apply
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our main duties as
a citizens
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citizens
a citizen
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.
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