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Some people think paying taxes is a big enough contribution to their society, while others think people have more responsibilities as members of society than only paying taxes. Discuss both these views and give your opinion:

There is considerable controversy about whether paying
taxes
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 is a sufficient contribution to
society
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,
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 some individuals are advocates of
this
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 idea, others believe that
people
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 are more responsible for their countries. On the one hand, some
people
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 argue that paying
taxes
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 is a big enough contribution. To support their idea, they claim that most problems we have in our
society
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 stem from the lack of enough infrastructure. So, the
government
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 can invest in the development of necessary infrastructure through tax collection.
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, under-resourced schools can be equipped, if the
government
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 have enough financial resources.
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, they
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 claim that tax payment provides enough money to support poor
people
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.
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, the
government
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 can pay these groups directly or subsidise their main costs,
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 as transportation costs.
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, some individuals believe that paying
taxes
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 is an insufficient contribution to
society
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. They believe that all problems cannot be solved only by limited financial resources which the
government
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 has.
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,
people
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 should help the
government
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 by spending their time and money voluntarily.
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, in Indonesia,
people
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 have constructed more than 100 schools only in 2 years,
while
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 the
government
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 needed more than 10 years to construct
this
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 number of schools. In conclusion, some
people
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 believe that paying
taxes
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 is enough to contribute to
society
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 and they claim that, the
government
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 can invest in necessary facilities and help weak groups of
people
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 with these
taxes
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.
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, I think some social issues are too big and the
government
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 cannot solve them only by its limited resources. So
people
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 are responsible for helping the
government
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 with volunteer activities.

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task achievement
Expand on the examples provided to make them more compelling and connect back to the main point more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that all sentences clearly connect to the overall argument and that paragraphs transition smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
The structure is clear, with distinct paragraphs that address both sides of the argument, and a succinct conclusion.
task achievement
The use of relevant examples, such as the situation in Indonesia, effectively supports the argument presented.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Contribution to society
  • Public services
  • Community involvement
  • Democratic participation
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Local economy
  • Cultural understanding
  • Voting rights
  • Volunteer work
  • Responsible citizenship
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