Your are stayig at your friend’s house who is travelling to another country. A recent strom damaged the house. Write a letter to your friend and say What happened and when What was damaged in the house What needs to be done about it
Hi Jasmine,
How are you?. I hope you are settling well in France. I am writing to you to deliver bad news regarding your balcony railing that got damaged
due to
the heavy storm last
night.
Anyways, last
night a heavy storm struck the city and wreaked havoc. However
, I didn't notice the damage until this
morning as the storm made it difficult to inspect it last
night, despite the deafening noise I heard. Unfortunately, a heavy branch of a neighbour's tree fell onto our balcony and damaged the railing.
As a result
, the metal railing has bent completely disfiguring the balcony and the impact has shattered the tiles too. Furthermore
, the damaged railing looks rusted and the sharp edges are exposed. Not to mention
, there is a huge log lounging in our Garden.
Hence
, I have called a welder to rectify this
situation with the railing and a handyman to remove the log from the garden. However
, we will have to replace the tiles. Although
, I was wondering if you know any contractor that you trust. Also
, we have to inform your dad.
I know it is very unfortunate and I understand the inconvenience that has been caused financially. Especially when you are abroad. But no worries, I will do my best to clear the mess. I got your back. I am sure you have a lot of questions. Please call me at your earliest convenience.
Warm regards,
BarbaraSubmitted by dhayaneyvijayan on
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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to ensure the letter flows smoothly by using connecting words. This will enhance the logical structure of your text.
Task Achievement
Be clear and specific about the actions you are taking regarding the issue. This will strengthen your task achievement further.
Task Response
You've done a great job of explaining what happened, detailing the damage, and outlining what needs to be done - all crucial elements to the task.
Tone
Your friendly and supportive tone is suitable for the situation, well-done.
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