IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
People are of the opinion that we are fortunate to be alive in the 21st century, compared to any other
time
Use synonyms
 in
history
Use synonyms
, I completely agree with the statement,
although
Linking Words
 living in the age of the Roman Empire sounds fascinating. There are multiple reasons to feel grateful to be living in the present
time
Use synonyms
. Some of these are the advancements in technology and the medical field. Compared to any other
time
Use synonyms
 in
history
Use synonyms
 we have access to gadgets that we can use to connect to anyone around the Globe.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, health has never been better with the availability of medical care and vaccines to tackle viruses and other diseases.
For example
Linking Words
, polio was an issue in the 1800s affecting many lives and in 1904 healthcare professionals came up with polio vaccines revolutionizing and curing a life-altering disease.
However
Linking Words
, there are some times in
history
Use synonyms
 that are so fascinating that it makes us wish to be alive at that moment, one of which is the period of the Roman Empire, The age of warrior and ancient advancement which changed the course of
history
Use synonyms
.
For instance
Linking Words
, the great ruler Marcus Arelies
who
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
revolutionized the kingdom by commissioning the Colessium, a stadium where the best of the best warriors go up against each other, which sounds so fascinating and full of excitement. All in all,
while
Linking Words
 the old times might sound interesting,
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
 do believe the best
time
Use synonyms
 to be living is in the present as it provides us with the opportunity to create
history
Use synonyms
 ourselves.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
Try to include more specific examples to support your points and provide detailed evidence that backs up your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph flows into the next by using linking phrases or connectives to help maintain a seamless transition between ideas.
coherence cohesion
Be careful with small grammatical inaccuracies, like "i" instead of "I," to maintain professionalism and accuracy in your writing.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a strong introduction that clearly states your opinion, setting a clear path for the reader.
task achievement
There is a comprehensive response to the task with a well-explored comparison between the present and a historical period.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and reinforces the essay's argument, leaving a satisfying end for the reader.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
What to do next:
Look at other essays: