The bar chart shows the divorce rate in tow Eurobean contries from 2011 and 2015.

The bar chart shows the divorce rate in tow Eurobean contries from 2011 and 2015.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart shows the divorce rate in tow Eurobean contries from 2011 and 2015.
The bar chart provides information about
divorces
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divorce
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percentages in
tow
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two
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countries
Finland
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and
Sweden
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between 2011 and 2015.
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,
Sweden
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experienced a downward trend,
while
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a
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Finland
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showed
an upward rates
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an upward rate
upward rates
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throughout the period. Both
countries’
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countries
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have some fluctuation,
as well as
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Finland
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initially
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had a lower
rate
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, it outraced
the
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apply
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Sweden
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Sweden's
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percent
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per cent
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at the
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end
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of the period.
Sweden
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’s
divorce
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rate
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in 2011 was about 45%, being higher than
Finland
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’s
rate
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by approximately 10%.
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the
rate
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increase
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increased
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to almost fifty percent.
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, the figure showed
gradual
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a gradual
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decreased to
the
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47% in 2013,
as well as
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, it continued to drop steadily till the
end
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of the period to around 46% in 2014,
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, the proportion in
Sweden
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’s
rate
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hitting
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hit
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the
low-point
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low point
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to
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apply
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almost 35% in 2015.
In
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the other hand,
percentage
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the percentage
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of
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divorce
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divorces
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in
Finland
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was less Than 40% in 2011, and it decreased in 2012 when about
one third
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one-third
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of marriages ended with
the
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apply
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divorce
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as a apposes direction in
Sweden
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it increased
till
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to
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almost
double
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doubled
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.
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, the figure experienced
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a slightly
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slightly increased
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slight increase
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to approximately 40% in 2013. The percentage showed continued growth in the
Finland
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divorce
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rate
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till the
end
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of
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the years
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years
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year
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to about 42% and outracing
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Sweden
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Sweden's
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rate
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at the
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end
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, at the end, however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words finland, sweden, rate, end, divorce with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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