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In many countries today, parents are able to send their children to single-sex schools or co-education schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree.

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It is argued that
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 who study in single-gender
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 are disadvantaged compared to the others.
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 essay disagrees completely with
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 statement because the curriculum is the same in these
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 as in standard ones and
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 because the previous generation used to study in
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 kind of educational institution. It is conspicuous that
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 in single-sex
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 learn about the same subjects as other learners in mixed-sex
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. Indeed, the first aim of going to school is to acquire knowledge in a wide range of varied topics and not to interact with the opposite gender. In
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 regard, the curriculum is exactly the same in these educational institutions and
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 benefit from a high quality of schooling.
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, they are not beneath the others. A recent study in Morocco
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 showcased the fact that more than 30% of the best
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 in the university were from single-sex
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. It is
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 crystal clear that the previous generation used to be schooled in
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 type of educational institution, without becoming ineffective citizens. In fact, our grandparents, who gave us our education
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 our moral values were commonly sent to single-gender
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.
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, many major figures in history were formed in, what seems nowadays, "particular" educational institutions.
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, Thomas Edison, a famous scientist who was responsible for the development of electricity, used to be schooled in a single-sex school. In conclusion, children who learn in single-sex
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 are not lacking anything compared to the others because they follow the same curriculum
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 to the fact that many great figures throughout history graduated from these educational institutions.

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task achievement
Try to include more counterarguments to strengthen your position even further.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs to enhance readability.
introduction conclusion present
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, framing the argument effectively.
relevant specific examples
The ideas are generally well-developed with relevant examples to support the main points, such as referencing significant figures like Thomas Edison.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Single-sex education/schools
  • Co-educational schools
  • Social interaction
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Gender stereotypes
  • Gender-diverse perspectives
  • Collaboration and competition
  • Empathy
  • Globalized world
  • Adaptation
  • Real-world situations
  • Professional settings
  • Reduced stereotypes
  • Personal and professional development
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