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You have received uniforms in your company that have to be worn by all employees. You are not satisfied with the uniform because it has some problems. Write a letter to your manager and in your letter consider the following points; Mention to positive points of the uniform. Clarify the problem that you have with the uniform. Suggest a solution for above mentioned problem.

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Dear Mr. Smith I am writing
this
 letter regarding the new uniforms distributed to all employees
last
 week and we all were ordered to wear them based on our new company policy.
Firstly
, I just wanted to mention that using uniform clothes as a new policy would be a great decision to keep all the colleagues having moderate same feelings of wearing during the work period and no one is thinking of new models anymore to show off in the working place,
moreover
, the design of the uniform is quite up to date and popular which most of the employees are happy about it.
On the other hand
, the logo which is inserted in the middle right of the shirt
although
 well-designed is merely from the printing types with unacceptable quality that spreads the inks when it is washed even with dry cleaning machines.
Accordingly
, I merely wanted to ask, to order the next series of uniforms which can be in six months later please change the type of logo from printing to another type by consulting the manufacturer considering the ink problem which is happened in the cleaning and washing process. Thanks for your consideration, Best regards Majid Ebadi
Submitted by majid.ebadi on

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coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your ideas more clearly to enhance logical flow. For instance, discuss all positive aspects in one paragraph and all negative aspects in another.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a single idea for greater clarity.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, giving your letter a professional tone.
task achievement
You addressed the task well by covering all required points: positive aspects of the uniform, the problem with it, and a suggestion for improvement.
task achievement
The writing tone is suitable for a formal letter, maintaining respect and professionalism.
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