The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts depict the information about individuals who have entered the Olympics since it starts from 1925 to 2012.
Overall
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, it can be observed from the bar chart that
womens
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women's
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participation had
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increased from negligible in
year
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1924, which improved over time and reached
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its peak in 2012,
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4800 females.
Regarding
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the year 1924, when
Olympics
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the Olympics
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was come
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to
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its
exsistance
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existence
, around 3000 Mens had participated
along with
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a few female athletes. In the next 28 years, it has observed more participants from previous years, with 4500
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and 500
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Women
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. It can be observed that
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the popularity
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of Olymics has increased over time, by 2012 it
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a record number of individuals
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approximately 6000
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Men
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and 5000
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Women
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. In the line graph, it is
illustarated
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illustrated
that in 1924, it
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recorded more than 3000 people in
Olympics
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the Olympics
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which
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gradually
rose
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from 3000 to 6300 people in 1984. After 1984,
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the popularity
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of games
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spiked for 28 years which rose the figures to more than 10000 in the year 2012.

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