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Band 3.5

people are living in a “throwaway society”, using things for a short time and then throwing them away. What are the causes of this? What problems does it lead to?

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Due to the
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 constant development of
the
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marketing tools and less
sustaibilty
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sustainability
 of the
products
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 is one of
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the majors
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majors reason
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major reasons
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 behind throwaway society nowadays.
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This
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 negative trends lead to increases
of
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in
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trash on the earth at
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an alarmimg
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alarmimg
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alarming
 rate causing enormous environmental
damages
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damage
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.
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 with, these days with the help of
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the internet
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internet
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 people have
a
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great access to the world through social media , which influences people
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especially
to
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youth to follow
celeberties
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celebrities
 and buy more
products
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 that are being promted by them even though they are not much needed.
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, nowadays, in order to increase the profit and sales of
products
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 companies make their
products
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 less
sustaible
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sustainable
 so that customer buy frequently their
products
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.
This
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 development has a adverse effect on
environment
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the environment
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 and humans as
repeatly
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repeatedly
 buying
products
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 eventually
lead
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leads
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 to more waste ,
although
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 the
goverments
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governments
government
 all over the world making arrangements to recycle
the
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waste in
effective
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an effective
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 and efficient way but trash
is being produce
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is being produced
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at
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a
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 large scale ,
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 it is geeting out of control.
Therefore
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dumbster
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dumpster
emits
greengases
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green gases
greenhouses
greengages
like carbon dioxide which result in
as
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increases
of
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global warming .
To sum up
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, without a doubt decreased quality of
products
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 and
influenced
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influence
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 of inappropriate role
modles
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models
modules
is
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are
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two
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the two
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 main
cause
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causes
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of
throwaway
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a throwaway
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 society which has
totally
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a totally
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 adverse effect on
environment
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the environment
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 as it leads to more
unnecessory
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unnecessary
 waste on the earth .

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next to maintain the reader’s engagement, using linking words and phrases where appropriate.
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Clarify and expand upon your main points to add depth to your argument.
coherence cohesion
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task achievement
The essay clearly identifies the primary causes of the throwaway society.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph has a clear purpose and contributes to the overall argument.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points of the essay and restates the thesis.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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