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In some country, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out the history of the house and building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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Nowadays, a
number
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 of
students
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 are not enrolled in
science
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subjects
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 at college in many nations because they have their own reasons, and it has some effects on the community.I will discuss both problems and effects on
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 in upcoming paragraphs. To start with, there are many reasons why pupils are not choosing
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 modules in their college.
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, it's undeniable things that
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 is
tougher
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 and
hard
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harder
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 subject than other
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 like art or language
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.
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,
science
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 subject requires logical thinking and has limited sources of knowledge available on the market.
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, many
students
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not
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 get jobs after completing graduation
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 that reason scholars do not purchase
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.
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,
according to
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 the 'TIME OF INDIA' around 40% of graduate are not able to get jobs in their fields.
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, it has some negative effects on society. The foremost is that the growth of the nation will gradually slow down. When
students
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 start to ignore
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, the
number
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 of solutions to problems or new inventions will decrease because a limited
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 of people are available to find solutions.
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, problems in the area will increase daily. Because
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 is the solution to every problem, if we don't have scientists, we might face issues in the coming days. In conclusion, the reduced
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 of
students
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 pursuing
science
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subjects
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 at university can have significant consequences for society, including a shortage of skilled professionals, reduced scientific progress, and a decline in innovation. Encouraging and inspiring
students
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 to pursue
science
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subjects
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 is crucial by making them more accessible, and practical, and highlighting the critical role that
science
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 plays in society's progress and development.

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task response
To strengthen the task response, ensure each paragraph clearly addresses a single aspect of the task with appropriate examples and detail. For instance, add more detailed reasons for the lack of interest in science subjects.
coherence
Improve coherence by adding clear transitions and ensuring ideas are linked smoothly from one paragraph to the next. This will aid in better understanding of the connections between points.
cohesion
For cohesion, use varied linking words to connect your ideas within and between sentences, making sure they contribute to the flow of the essay.
task response
The essay addresses the task by discussing both the reasons and effects, achieving a well-rounded exploration of the topic.
coherence
Introduction and conclusion are present, providing a coherent start and end to the discussion.
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Key points are supported with examples, such as citing 'TIME OF INDIA,' which adds credibility to the claims made.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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