You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter • explain why you want to reduce your working hours • say which hours you would like to work • describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

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Dear Employer, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to you to request a reduction in my working time in order to enrol in an extracurricular class. I am going to learn about new techniques in artificial intelligence. I would like to have some extra free time during the week in order to study and attend my classes.

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, I prefer to only come to

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in the evening during weekdays and spend my time in the morning on my studies. If it is necessary I can

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work on some extra tasks on the weekends.

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topic will be useful for my incoming projects in the company. To clarify, as a software developer, it is always essential to be

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and familiar with the trends of the technology. So I believe the information I learn from

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subject will assist me in my tasks. if my suggested schedule does not align with your requirements, I would be grateful to hear your recommendations. I am looking forward to hearing back from you. Yours Faithfully, Mahsa.

mahsa.fathi.98Thu Jan 30 2025

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Task Achievement

You have clearly explained your reasons for wanting to reduce your working hours and have described the potential benefits to your employer. However, providing more specific details about how often your classes would require your absence or more precise working hours could enhance clarity.

Coherence and Cohesion

While your letter is generally well-structured, ensuring a smoother connection between the reasons for reducing hours and the proposed schedule might improve the flow. Adding transitional phrases could also enhance coherence.

Coherence and Cohesion

The greeting and closing of your letter are professional and appropriate, creating a respectful tone.

Task Achievement

Your writing tone is suitable and professional, making a persuasive case for your request.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

182 words

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