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Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Today, professional photographers constantly take pictures of celebrities everywhere they go.
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 some regard it as a positive movement, others believe it is wrong to follow these
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 is more of a negative
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 concern On the one hand, professional photographs of famous
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 are interesting for the public.
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 famous
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 tend to live a higher-quality life compared to ordinary
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, it is understandable that
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 are eager to watch celebrities' outfits encouraging them to increase their
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, in Turkey,
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 the high number of paparazzi and shared photographs with
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,
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 have more access to
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famous
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's outfits .
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, an estimated 70% of
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 tends to follow the latest trends and buy trendy clothes, leading to a more good-looking
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 because of individuals' well-tailored appearance.
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, opponents including myself, are concerned about the disturbance of emotions. Not surprisingly, public figures are always complaining about the lack of
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 in their daily lives. So, the more they are followed by the paparazzi, the more they avoid attending crowded places to prevent unauthorized shootings. To illustrate an uncomfortable feeling of actors and singers toward
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, not only
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privacy
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 violation has resulted in the social phobia of hundreds of these exposed celebrities, but it negatively affected their performances in the long term. In conclusion,
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 photographing famous
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 anywhere they go creates a better-looking
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 in some areas temporarily, I believe,
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 negative effects of
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 violation are of greater concern to take into account. Unfortunately,
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 lives of
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people
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 involves their long-term mental health issues and
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 their professional performance.
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, legal obligations should warn photographers to get authorization in advance.

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Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines the reasons for your opinion, as this will strengthen your position.
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Try to develop your ideas further with more examples or explanations to enhance the depth of your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Consider using transitional phrases to improve the flow between paragraphs and improve coherence within your essay.
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Make sure all sentences are grammatically accurate to enhance clarity in your writing.
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Your essay addresses both views, which is important for a balanced discussion.
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The use of examples, like the situation in Turkey, effectively supports your arguments on fashion influence.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Celebrity status
  • Public interest
  • Invasion of privacy
  • Mental health impact
  • Media scrutiny
  • Personal freedom
  • Ethical considerations
  • Public figure
  • Consent
  • Balance
  • Surveillance
  • Unwanted photography
  • Admiration
  • Inspiration
  • Intrusive
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