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The bar chart depicts the distribution of income groups, namely low (40,000 dollars or less), lower middle (40,00 - 70,000 dollars), middle (70,000 - 120,00 dollars), and high (120,000 dollars or more) in the cities and the regional centers of Australia.

The bar chart depicts the distribution of income groups, namely low (40,000 dollars or less), lower middle (40,00 - 70,000 dollars), middle (70,000 - 120,00 dollars), and high (120,000 dollars or more) in the cities and the regional centers of Australia.
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The diagram illustrates the percentage of
Australian
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Australians
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 for each
income
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groups
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group
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 in
cities
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 and regional
centres
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. It shows that
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people
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 in
cities
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have
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are
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 wealthier than
people
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 in regional
centres
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. The percentage of
people
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belong
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belonging
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 to
middle
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the middle
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 and
high
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high-income
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income
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group
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groups
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 in
cities
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are
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is
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 higher than those in regional
centres
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. As seen in the chart, more than one-third
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people
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of people
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 in
cities
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 have
average
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an average
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income
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 between 70,000 to 120,000 dollars which
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percentage points higher than
people
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 in regional
centres
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.
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, more
people
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 in
cities
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 earn more than 120,000 dollars monthly
income
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 compared to those in regional
centres
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. On the other side, around 23% of
people
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 in regional
centres
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 are classified as
lower
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a lower
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income
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 group, with
average
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an average
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of
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apply
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expenditure per capita
income
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 are less than 40,000 dollars, which
are
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is
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 almost two times higher than in
cities
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.
Furthermore
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, the share of
lower
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the lower
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 middle
income
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 group
are
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is
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 slightly lower in
cities
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 than in regional
centres
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, cities, centres, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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