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The chart below shows information about subway systems in three major European cities.

The chart below shows information about subway systems in three major European cities.
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the table chart provides key information about metro systems found in three cities. The units are measured in Km.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the subway systems in each city are classified into three categories depending on the size of the system
like
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apply
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the total track of the length including underground and on the surface,
Correct article usage
the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of
stations
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 in operation, and
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number
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a number
the number
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 of daily
passengers
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.
According to
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 what is shown the track length of the London
underground
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Underground
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 was 408 Km,
while
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 the
number
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 of
the
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apply
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stations
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are
Wrong verb form
was
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 275.
Although
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,
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apply
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 the
number
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 of
the
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apply
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passengers
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 daily is three million, the
number
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 of
the
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apply
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passengers
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in
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on
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Paris
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the Paris
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 metro was higher with 4.5 million
passengers
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use
Wrong verb form
using
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 it,
while
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 the
number
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 of
stations
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 in operation
were
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was
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 300 more than
London
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in London
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. In terms of the Moscow
metro
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metro,
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 the length of the track is 300 km.
However
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, it has 182
stations
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,
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while
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and
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 the
number
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 of daily
passengers
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are
Change the verb form
is
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 6.5 million people that use it.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stations, number, passengers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 7 times.
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