The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the bar graph given illustrates the
number
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of individuals who came to museums in London from 2007 to 2012. These museums were
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the National
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Gallery
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, Victoria and
Albert
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Museum
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and British
Museum
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. Based on an
overall
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perspective, it can be seen that in the past,
particulary
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particularly
in 2007, the Victorian and
Albert
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Museum
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obtained the highest
number
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of
visitors
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,
while
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the National
Gallery
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took the latest spot.
However
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, in 2012, the position changed,
that
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and
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the National
Gallery
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attained the first position,
while
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the Victoria and
Albert
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Museum
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got the latest place. From the initial figure, the National
Gallery
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visitors
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grew significantly from 7
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millions
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million
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people
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in 2007 to 16
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millions
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million
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individuals in 2012. In 2010 and 2011, the
number
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of individuals who
visitted
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visited
visit
this
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museum
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remained stable by around 12%.
Secondly
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, the Victoria and
Albert
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Museum
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visitors
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dropped fluctuatively from 14
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millions
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million
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in 2007 to 10
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millions
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million
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in 2012. In 2007 and 2008, the
number
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of
people
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who came to
this
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museum
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remain
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stable by 14
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millions
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million
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, but significantly dropped in 2009 by around 8
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millions
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million
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people
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.
On the other hand
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, the lowest point was in 2010 with only 6
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millions
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million
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visitors
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.
Moreover
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, the
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visitors
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number of visitors
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grew to 10
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millions
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million
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in 2012.
Lastly
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, the British
Museum
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got the second
spots
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spot
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in 2007 by around 12
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millions
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million
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people
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. But, it dropped significantly in 2008 and 2009 with 6
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millions
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million
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people
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.
However
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, it increased significantly to around 14
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millions
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million
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in 2012.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, gallery, albert, museum, visitors, millions, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 4 times.
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