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"The Importance of Sleep" discuss the topic and the prose and cons of lack sleep

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Sleep is one of the most important things for our well-being, yet many people do not get enough of it. A good night's sleep helps us wake up refreshed, stay focused, and be more productive during the day.
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, modern lifestyles usually lead to poor sleep habits creating sleep debt which can harm both the body and mind.
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 with, lack of sleep makes it harder to focus and make good decisions. Some people try to fix
this
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 by catching up on sleep on weekends, though
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 does not fully restore lost rest.
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, things like night work, relying too much on an alarm clock, or snoozing in the morning can affect our biological rhythm, making sleep problems even worse.
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, Stress and overthinking are
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 major sleep disruptors. Many people struggle with mind racing or rumination at night which leads to insomnia.
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, the body’s natural sleep cycle is still influenced by melatonin and core body temperature which means that keeping a regular sleep routine is important. In conclusion, good sleep is essential for our mental health, and if we do not take it seriously, we will fall into a vicious cycle of exhaustion.
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, if we focus on making sleep a priority, it can improve both our health and
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 quality of life.

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Task Achievement
Consider introducing some specific examples or data to support your claims about the effects of sleep deprivation. For instance, you might reference studies that show the impact of sleep on productivity or mental health.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to enhance the flow of your essay by using more linking words or phrases between sentences and ideas. This will help to create a stronger logical progression.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, which effectively frame your arguments.
Task Achievement
You successfully articulate the negative effects of sleep deprivation on focus and decision-making, which is essential for the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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