Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter: - Thank them for the photos and for the holiday. - Explain why you didn't write earlier. - Invite them to come and stay with you.

#month #holiday #friends #photos

Dear Cijo / Jason, Hope you

guys

are doing

good

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well

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. I just saw the

pictures

that

was

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were

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taken by you

guys

during my stay at your place. Surprisingly, the

pictures

have come out so well. Honestly, I was not expecting any

pictures

from that day

especially

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, especially

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considering how tired we all were after attending the wedding. I had

such

a nice time with you

guys

and thanks for the

pictures

, they just look

fantabulous

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fantastic

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. I'm sorry, I couldn't write to

you'll

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you

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earlier since I was not able to access my

mails

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emails

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due to

some issue with the internet connection here.

Also

, I do not check my personal

mails

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mail

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that often until I happened to come to my

neighbors

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neighbours

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place today and randomly checked my inbox. Seriously, I would really appreciate it if you

guys

could come over to my place during the Eid holidays

that

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are

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coming up next week. We can

also

plan for a road trip to Hatta and Umm Al Quwain

while

you are here. Looking

forwarding

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forward

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to seeing you

guys

soon. Best Regards, Vipin Abraham

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph has a single clear idea and flows smoothly into the next to improve cohesion.

task achievement

Try to avoid minor spelling mistakes such as 'you'll' which should be 'you all.'

task achievement

The letter covers all the required points thoroughly.

task achievement

The tone is friendly and appropriate for a letter to friends.

coherence cohesion

The letter has a good logical structure, with a clear beginning, middle, and end.

coherence cohesion

The closing is natural and provides a clear next step.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

179 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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