Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter: - Thank them for the photos and for the holiday. - Explain why you didn't write earlier. - Invite them to come and stay with you.

Dear Cijo / Jason, Hope you
guys
are doing
good
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well
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. I just saw the
pictures
that
was
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taken by you
guys
during my stay at your place. Surprisingly, the
pictures
have come out so well. Honestly, I was not expecting any
pictures
from that day
especially
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considering how tired we all were after attending the wedding. I had
such
a nice time with you
guys
and thanks for the
pictures
, they just look
fantabulous
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. I'm sorry, I couldn't write to
you'll
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you
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earlier since I was not able to access my
mails
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emails
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due to
some issue with the internet connection here.
Also
, I do not check my personal
mails
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mail
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that often until I happened to come to my
neighbors
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neighbours
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place today and randomly checked my inbox. Seriously, I would really appreciate it if you
guys
could come over to my place during the Eid holidays
that
is
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are
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coming up next week. We can
also
plan for a road trip to Hatta and Umm Al Quwain
while
you are here. Looking
forwarding
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to seeing you
guys
soon. Best Regards, Vipin Abraham
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a single clear idea and flows smoothly into the next to improve cohesion.
task achievement
Try to avoid minor spelling mistakes such as 'you'll' which should be 'you all.'
task achievement
The letter covers all the required points thoroughly.
task achievement
The tone is friendly and appropriate for a letter to friends.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a good logical structure, with a clear beginning, middle, and end.
coherence cohesion
The closing is natural and provides a clear next step.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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