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Band 2.5

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local costum and behavior others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural difference Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Some individuals think that tourists visiting a new
country
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 should obey the traditional outfits of the host
country
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while
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 others believe that they should have the flexibility in accepting
culture
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cultural
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 differences. I definitely support the belief of the second group. Those who agree with
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 opinion view
as
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it as
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 a solution to avoid cultural
attack
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attacks
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. They believe
young
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the young
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 generation should be
preserved
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protected
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 from the
colorful
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colourful
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 useless attractions of other
counties
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countries
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.
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, in the long run, we will witness
less
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fewer
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 signs of disappearing
the
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apply
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traditions. The opponents hold
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thus
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this
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 view that freedom should be respected in all aspects. If governments run strict rules against
tourists
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tourists'
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 clothing, it may result in a decrease in the number of tourists in future years.
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 can lead to a negative impact on the economy of countries which are built on tourist industry. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with limiting people who
visiting
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visit
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 a
country
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 in terms of their clothes style. Schools, training centers and other public and private organizations can
develope
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develop
 other innovative methods to advertise the culture of the destination
country
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.
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, a
port
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portion
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 of the income
of
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from
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 tourism activities can be allocated to publicize traditional
costoms
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customs
 in the
goverments
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government
 annual budget.

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Provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention specific countries and how they handle cultural differences with tourists.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your ideas are clearly organized and logically flow from one to the next. Consider using clear topic sentences for each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied vocabulary and complex sentence structures to enhance your writing quality.
task achievement
You provide a clear opinion on the topic, which is important for argumentative essays.
task achievement
You recognize both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of the complexities of the issue.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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