The pie chart shows how people use four modes of transport in the city of Edmonton,as well as how the table shows data from five different driving reasons.

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A glance at the pie chart given illustrates the way people are using four modes of transportation in the town, particularly in Edmonton. The four groups of transportation contain
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car
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cars
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, LRT,
bus
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buses
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, and
taxi
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taxis
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. The table given
also
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depicts the motives of individuals for using the
car
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in the town. Based on an
overall
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perspective, the majority
citizens
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in Edmonton are using
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car
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cars
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,
while
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public transportation
such
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as
bus
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buses
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and
taxi
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taxis
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attains
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the
last
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spots by 10%.
On the other hand
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, going to work obtains the first position for the reason individuals
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the
car
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instead
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of other commuters.
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, the
activies
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activities
,
such
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as shopping and leisure activities, take the
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place for people using the
car
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. From the
intial
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initial
figure,
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car
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the car
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takes the first position by 45%,
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the second place is Light Rail Transit (LRT) by 35%.
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, the
last
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positions are bus and taxi, which are both of them in 10%. The following figure
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the motives why individuals
chose
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car
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to commute in Edmonton. Commuting to work takes the first place by 55%.
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, the next reasons are doing business by 45%, taking kids to school by 40%,
shoping
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shopping
by 15% and leisure activities by 15%, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, such, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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