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Band 4.5

Right now, private companies like SpaceX or Blue Origin can freely fly into space whenever they want. Governments should regulate and restrict space tourism to ensure safety and sustainability. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, some private companies specialized
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 exploring and making actions connected with
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 are able to effortlessly fly into
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.
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 situation should be strictly regulated in order to ensure safety. I disagree with
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 notion as
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 companies are not only already considered safe but
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governments
. First of all, many companies tend to provide more effective and cost-efficient procedures which is why it is essential to support them.
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, their customers (countries and individuals) could save millions of dollars by allowing them to do
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 and experiments freely.
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 X and Blue Origin, at present, are able to deliver the same items ten times cheaper compared to the national projects.
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, the increased number of laws and restrictions would lead to unnecessary
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 which is obviously negative.
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, the most significant laws have been successfully applied at the
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 of
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projects
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 so there is no need to be worried about unexpected danger.
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,
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 their general budget, new
type
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 of trips would be
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the most protected and advanced in the
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 future. To illustrate,
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recent statistics, the percentage of successfully delivered products during the
experemental
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experimental
 flights is over three-quarters.
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, the wide opportunity to
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 for many private communities based on aircraft is the consequence of rapid and cheap services compared to the national analogues.
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,
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 the huge number of different experiments,
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, studies, etc.
space
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 adventures are likely to be one of the most safe kinds of trips in the future which is why additional regulations are unnecessary.

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The essay presents a clear personal stance on the issue, which is crucial for task achievement.
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The use of examples like SpaceX and Blue Origin is effective in illustrating your main points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • private companies
  • SpaceX
  • Blue Origin
  • freely
  • fly into space
  • regulate
  • restrict
  • space tourism
  • safety
  • sustainability
  • disagree
  • government regulation
  • standardized procedures
  • limited access
  • overcrowding
  • preserve resources
  • sustainable practices
  • protection
  • celestial bodies
  • contamination
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