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Band 6.5

A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called `the book that influenced me most`. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In our letter: Describe what this book was about Explain how this book influenced you Sa whether this book would be likely to influence other people

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Dear Sara, Hope you’re doing well. I’m so excited to hear that you have been accepted into your favourite major, Modern Art, at Holk University, and I’d be glad to help you find suitable accommodation. As you may know, I stayed in the university’s dormitory for around a year,
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, I wasn’t satisfied at all. Our rooms were so crowded and I couldn’t concentrate on my studies.
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, I found a tiny flat in downtown and moved there when I was a sophomore. I think the best way to look for accommodation is through the Internet. Nowadays there are various websites that post about available flats
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 some photos and information in detail,
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 as Sibindi and Armout, which make it easy to find a house.
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, be aware of fake advertisements that
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 various facilities and affordable prices to catch your attention, and don’t sign any paper before visiting the apartment. If I were you, I would stay in a hostel for a month to have the chance to consider all the available options before making any decision. Please feel free to contact me if you have any other questions. Good luck Tiara

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Task Response
Ensure that your letter adheres to the prompt by addressing the topic of the book that influenced you, rather than discussing accommodation.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to structure your paragraphs more clearly by keeping each paragraph focused on a single idea, which will enhance readability.
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Your letter has a friendly and supportive tone, which is appropriate for this type of correspondence.
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You provide practical advice regarding accommodation, displaying your understanding of the needs of the recipient.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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