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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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"The line graph illustrates the number of
store
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openings
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 and
closures
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 between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
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, the number of
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closures
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 fluctuated over the period, ending with a slight increase.
In contrast
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, the number of
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openings
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 showed a steady decline. At the beginning of the period,
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closures
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 were high, at around 6,500, but they dropped sharply to approximately 600 before rising again to about 5,100. Meanwhile,
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openings
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 started at nearly 8,500 and declined to about 4,000, after which they increased slightly to 6,000. Both trends showed fluctuations over the years. In summary,
store
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closures
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initially
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 declined before rising again,
whereas
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openings
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 experienced an
overall
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 downward trend despite some minor recoveries."

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words store, openings, closures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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