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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.
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The graphs illustrate the exportation of
pineapple
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 worldwide by the
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top three
pineapple
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-creating nations in 2009 and 2019.
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the breakdown
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 of the price of each
pineapple
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 in 2019 until reaches to customer.
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, in
country
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 A there was a significant increase in the production of
pineapple
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.
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,
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 B had a huge decrease in producing
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. The highest cost of
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 process for Distribution and retail. In 2019, there was
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rose
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 in the production of
pineapple
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 in nation A by over 10 metric tonnes
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 in 2009 only 1 metric tonne.
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,
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 C slightly increased between the two periods. Notably, in
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 B there obvious decline in the production of
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 from nearly 5 metric tonnes to just over 1 metric tonne.
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, the analysis of the cost for each
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 considered the
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 price for Distribution and retail with 35%.
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, the lowest cost for
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each
pineapple
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were taxes
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 by 4%.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • dominant
  • emerging trends
  • production costs
  • transportation
  • retailer markup
  • global trade dynamics
  • sustainability
  • market demand
  • economic factors
  • export volumes
  • logistic costs
  • retail price
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