Some people believe that having sport in schools is a waste of time and resources, whilst other believe that sport in school is a vital part of education. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays students don’t have a lot of movement in their daily lives.

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there have always been different views that argue if

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sport

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time is necessary in schools or not, one of them seems more convincing to me. I will discuss both perspectives

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and give my personal opinion. It has been discovered by science that physical activity improves mental well-being. Higher mental status brings

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understanding of school lessons.

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, my sister who has

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in mathematics

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all of her math homework

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after her karate class because exercise gives her

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energy

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her

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to cope with math giant. Another thing about

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class is discipline and teamwork. Children learn how to have less struggle with their peers, and

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learn how their work affects other people. On the other side, spending money on

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facilities is just

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of money.

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, if schools and

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resist

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on these they should keep it for insurance and medical care in future as doing exercise

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direct

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connection with health

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, people who have lived their whole life in villages would have less trouble when they get old because of having

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of movement in a day.

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group

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put up

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study-time

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by increasing

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time. As I said mental health makes

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environment for learning, and the most important thing which helps

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mental problems is

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sport

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. I strongly agree that

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-time plays a pivotal role in

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and future of children.

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, schools

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and governmental organizations had better

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include some exercise plans

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students’

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Make sure to clearly express your viewpoint in the introduction and conclusion to strengthen your argument.

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Try to ensure that each point is clearly supported with well-structured arguments and examples to enhance your case.

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Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity.

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You presented both sides of the argument which is essential for this type of essay.

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Your examples, particularly about your sister, are relatable and provide insight into the importance of sports.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

271 words

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