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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The
table
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 and pie charts illustrate data on the police budget in specific
place
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places
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of
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in
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 Britain. The
Table
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 gives information about
how
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where
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 the fee
cane
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came
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 from
while
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 the pie
chant
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chart
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 demonstrates the percentages of how the money
spent
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was spent
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 between 2017 to 2018.
Overall
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, As can be seen in the
table
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 the National Government
hed
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had
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 the highest percentage in 2018
compering
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compared
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 to other local Taxes and other
sources
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.
However
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,
According to
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 Pic
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chapt,
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chapt
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the
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apply
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money was spent more
2018
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in 2018
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for
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on
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officer
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officers
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 and staff
salary
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salaries
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 in 2018.
According to
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 the data
which have
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apply
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shown in the
table
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 ,between 2017 and 2018, There
are
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was
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 a small change in
sources
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national
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of national
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 government
sources
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 and local Taxes .
In addition
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, the other
sources
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 like grants remained similar
in
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for
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 two years
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, the buildings and transport from 2017 to 2018 the percentage was
similer
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similar
17
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to 17
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%. But in Technology
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fees
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fee
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fee,
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it
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apply
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increase
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increased
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 to 14% in 2018.
Moreover
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, there was a decrease in the officers and staff salaries
comparing
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compared
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 to 2017 75% and 2018 69%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, sources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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