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Band 3.5

You rented a car from a company and while you were driving on holiday, you had a small accident. You will have to write a letter to the company and in your letter. Explain when and from where you rented it Describe how the accident happened what kind of action did you take after the accident

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter about
rental
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the rental
a rental
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car
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 which one
i
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I
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 took from Nawab
motors
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Motors
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 on January 09,2025 at 11 am After
i
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I
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 pick
the
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up the
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car
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 and go to Halifax. There
is
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was
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 heavy snowfall on January 10,2025 in
morning
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the morning
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 time i
drive
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drove
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 the
car
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 slowly because of
snow
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the snow
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 one
car
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coming
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came
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 fast and he
doesn't
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didn't
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 see
yield
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the yield
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 sign
and
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apply
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I suddenly applied brakes my
car
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was sliding
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slid
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 down
in
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into
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ditch
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the ditch
a ditch
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 and
car
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 driver side front alloys wheel banded or front bumper broken. I dial
emergency
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the emergency
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 number and call
police
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the police
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. I
also
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 want to inform you about
this
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 accident. With the help of
police
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the police
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car
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moved
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was moved
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 to
repair
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a repair
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 shop i will pay for
this
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car
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 repair service and any charges
of
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from
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 your company.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Yadi

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your letter into clear paragraphs. Start with an introduction, then describe the accident, and conclude with your actions afterwards.
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Make sure to use correct grammar and spelling to improve clarity. For example, 'which one' should be 'which I rented'.
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Be more specific in your description of the events. Instead of 'there is heavy snowfall', you could say 'there was heavy snowfall'.
task achievement
You clearly explained the location and time of the rental which addresses part of the task.
task achievement
Your intention to inform the company of the accident shows responsibility.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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