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Band 5

Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to make vehicle drivers to take a test every year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Road
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 traffic
accidents
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 have been increasing drastically for the past two decades
due to
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rise
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 in
vehicles
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vehicle
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 usage. Some
people
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 argue that drivers should take a driving
test
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 every year to prevent
accidents
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 and improve
road
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 safety. I totally disagree with
this
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 statement and state my reasons in
this
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 essay. The first and foremost thing is most
people
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 cannot afford to take
driving
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test
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 every year because of poor financial situations.
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,
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test taking
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test-taking
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 process is
frustating
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frustrating
 and
time consuming
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time-consuming
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. Many
people
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 who drive
two wheelers
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two-wheelers
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 and
four wheelers
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four-wheelers
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 are either poor or middle class so they don't have
the
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enough money to prepare for the
test
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.
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, they need to take leave on
test
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 day and follow up
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 processes.
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Yearly
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a Yearly
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 driving
test
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 costs around 1000 Rupees in India and takes
minimum
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 of 4 days
preparation
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of preparation
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. Some
people
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 are not
priveledged
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privileged
 to take off in the company. Another important reason is driving skills are related to
musle
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muscle
 memory. So, once learned it cannot be forgotten.
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, taking
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test
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tests
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 repeatedly is
waste
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a waste
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 of time and energy. The major reason for traffic
accidents
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 is
law breaking
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 individuals. These individuals should be fined and imprisoned to improve
road
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 safety.
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 to that, the workload and expenses of the government will increase and lead to mistakes in newly
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test taking
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people
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's
license
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licenses
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. In conclusion, yearly
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test taking
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test-taking
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 is not a viable solution to improve
road
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 safety because it is difficult for
people
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 to spend time and money every year. Implementing strict rules and regulations for
law breaking
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law-breaking
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 individuals can prevent most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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accidents
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.

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Try to include more examples and evidence to support your arguments.
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Ensure your ideas flow logically from one to another, using linking phrases where appropriate.
coherence and cohesion
Work on expanding your sentences and using a variety of sentence structures to enhance readability.
task achievement
You presented a clear opinion in your introduction, making your stance evident right from the start.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a logical progression of ideas, especially in the first and second paragraphs.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road safety
  • vehicle drivers
  • take a test
  • up-to-date
  • rules and regulations
  • driving skills
  • identify
  • issues
  • problems
  • financially burdensome
  • behavior on the road
  • performance in a test
  • road infrastructure
  • enforcement of traffic laws
  • accompany
  • measures
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