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Given maps illustrate information on how Frenton changed over 32 years between 1990 and 2012.

Given maps illustrate information on how Frenton changed over 32 years between 1990 and 2012.
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The pictures depict the transformation of Frenton over 32 years. The first picture displays the Frenton
in1990
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in 1990
 and the second one shows how it was during 2012. 
Overall
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, several notable changes can be observed. The most significant transformation was in the structure of the place. A closer examination
to
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 the maps reveals that
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 some areas and buildings stayed intact, most of the area underwent major improvements.
For instance
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, in 1990, there used to
bank
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banks
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. In 2012, it had been changed into a restaurant.
Also
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, there was
a
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an
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 area of trees which had been converted into a technopark.
Further
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 structural modifications include
conversion
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the conversion
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 of
cafe
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a cafe
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 and park to a hotel and golf course for people to accommodate. 
Moreover
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, the number of
flats
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 had been increased. The playing field and houses had been turned into blocks of
flats
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.
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, additional
flats
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 had been constructed between the blocks of
flats
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.
Supermarket
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Supermarkets
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 took the place of shops.
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,
change
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the change
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 from theatre to cinema reflects the transition to technological advancements. Despite these changes, school, library and hospital stayed stable.
However
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, the hospital had been extended.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words flats with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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