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As computers are being used more and more in education, there will soon be no role for the teacher in the classroom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, artificial intelligence has surpassed humans in many ways. Now we use AIs in our day-to-day lives
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 as ChatGPT. It is widely believed that
teachers
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 are going to be replaced by AIs near future.
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, there are certain things that only
teachers
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 can do for students. In my opinion, I disagree. Computers cannot substitute
teachers
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 for two reasons.
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, children in development need emotional empathy. Children socialize themselves by communicating with peers and
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, which includes arguments, chitchat, etc. During
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 process, only human
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 can empathize with students solve problems and strengthen their pros.
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, AI educators can'
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. Even if they do, which is only imitation, can'
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 have the same effect as humans do.
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, the role of
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 is evolving rather than disappearing.
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 can become facilitators of learning, using technology to enhance educational experiences, guiding students in their learning journeys and helping them navigate resources and information. From my experience, my head teacher used to use online classes so that we could engage in our classes freely. We could mark important points during the class and debate as much as we want. To summarise, from the perspective of education, artificial intelligence cannot invade humans' territory for two reasons. Since they don'
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 have emotions, they can'
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 serve as much as
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' ability to provide socialization.
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, development of the technology expanded the boundaries of education. The teacher-student communication is much easier and more effective.

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Task Achievement
Your introduction sets a clear stance, but consider making it more engaging by providing a brief context or statistic leading into your opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The phrases you used to transition between points are good, but using more varied linking words could improve the flow of your essay.
Task Achievement
While your examples are relevant, including some specific instances or studies about the role of teachers could enhance your argument.
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The essay presents a clear opinion against the replacement of teachers by AI, which is a solid basis for your arguments.
Task Achievement
You effectively articulate the emotional and social aspects of teaching that AI cannot replicate, providing a thoughtful perspective.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personalized learning
  • adaptive learning
  • engagement
  • facilitator
  • educational content
  • empathy
  • socialization
  • human elements
  • motivation
  • accessibility
  • navigate
  • resources
  • emotional support
  • instructional technology
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