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The charts below give information on the ages o the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages o the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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The four-pie graph provided a
proportion
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 of public
ages
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 in Yemen and Italy in the specific year 2000 and the prediction for 2050 in three various groups of
ages
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: 0-14, 15-59 and +60
years
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. The
first
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two
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charts
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 illustrated the
ages
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 of the population in Yemen,
whereas
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 the second
two
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charts
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 illustrated the
ages
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 of the population in Italy.
Overall
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, the ratios of
ages
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 in Yemen and Italy were relatively variable.
In addition
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, the 15-59
years
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group
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 has the greatest percentages during the given
years
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. Turning to the
first
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two
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charts
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, it can be observed that in 2000 the
group
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 of 0-14
years
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 took the
first
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 place by almost half of the
proportion
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 (50.1%), followed by the
group
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 of 15-59
years
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 in above 46%.
However
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, in 2050 the
group
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 of 15-59
years
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 will take the
first
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 place with 57.3% of the
proportion
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 and the
group
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 +60
years
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 will take the
last
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 place with just under 6% of the
proportion
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.
In contrast
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, the situation was significantly disrated in Italy. By taking a closer look at the second
two
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charts
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 it can be observed that, in 2000 the
group
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 15-59
years
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 had the most amount of percentage with 61.1% of the
ages
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 of population.
However
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, in 2050 the same
group
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 will have almost under half of the
proportion
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 (46.2%).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, ages, years, first, two, charts, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age distribution
  • demographics
  • elderly population
  • workforce
  • dependency ratio
  • population projections
  • ageing society
  • youthful population
  • social services
  • health care burden
  • economic growth
  • fertility rate
  • life expectancy
  • pension system
  • immigration
  • sustainable development
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