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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other type of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and and give your own opinion.

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Dear Mr Sinan I am writing to you to ask for a short seven day leave next
mounth
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month
. The
metter
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matter
 is my
coisine
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cuisine
cousin
 is going to get married and invites me to his wedding. I should go because he is like
be
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a brother
for
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to
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 me and he wants me to be his best man. İf possible ı
want
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want to
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 go to
england
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England
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for
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apply
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next week. The wedding
on
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is on
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 the 14th of
febuary
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february
 in
london
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London
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.
Thus
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 ı need to be there at least on the 12th of
febuary
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february
. I would like to have several days
for
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 spend some time with my family. You know my family
living
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 there And ı will be here after two
week
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weeks
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Monday
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on monday
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monday
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Monday
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 I finished my
work
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 for
this
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 week. You should not worry about my
work
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 I talked
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Series
Sernes
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to Sernes
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for
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about
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this
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 situation and he
agree
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agreed
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 to do my
work
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 too
and
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ı described my
work
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 to
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series
sernes
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then
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 he learned He tried a time
then
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 ı
check
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checked
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this
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 it
has
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was
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 not
any
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a
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 problem Thank you advice for your understanding
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Your
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 sincerely Emir Yalçındağ

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general
Make sure to proofread your letter for spelling and grammatical errors, as this affects clarity.
grammar
Ensure that your sentences are clear and grammatically correct. For instance, 'my coisine' should be 'my cousin'.
coherence
It may help to organize your points into paragraphs to improve logical structure, for example, one paragraph explaining the reason for your leave, and another discussing work arrangements.
coherence
Provide a clearer introduction and conclude your letter with a summary of your request.
content
You clearly expressed your reason for requesting leave, which is a significant part of task achievement.
content
You’ve shown that you’ve arranged for your work to be covered in your absence, which demonstrates responsibility.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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