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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph
illustares
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illustrates
 information data about  the number of tourists,
which
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who
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 visited  various islands in
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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, are 2010 to 2017.
Overal
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, it's clear that
total
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the total
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increase
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increases
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fastly
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fast
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, and in the end, it reaches the dominant position.
Visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 have a middle rate, but in the
end
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 it
decrease
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decreases
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.
Visitors
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 staying on cruise ships have a bigger progress than
visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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. Looking at the information in more
details
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detail
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, we can notice that
total
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the total
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, which was superior, had
growth
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a growth
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1
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of 1
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to 3,5
in
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from
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 2010 to 2017 without
declining
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.
However
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,
visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 climbed
before
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from
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 around 0,75 to 1,5 in 2013,
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then
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and then
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 it
had
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apply
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a steadily
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steadily
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 fluctuation. In the end, it didn't change 1.5 in 2017
that
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 was inferior. In 2010,
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships was less than 0,5,
afterward
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afterward,
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 it
rised
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raised
rise
rose
 about 0,5 to 2 between 2010 and 2017.
Furthermore
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,
Visitors
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 staying on cruise ships
also
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Visitors
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 staying on
island
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 crossed between 2015 to 2016 roughly 1.25.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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