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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
travellers
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 to a specific destination from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 has increased noticeably throughout the given period. Despite the majority
initially
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 staying on the
island
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,
this
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 trend was surpassed by those arriving on
cruise
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ships
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 in the
last
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 two years. The
number
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 of
travellers
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 on
cruise
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ships
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 increased,
while
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 the
number
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 of
travellers
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 staying on the
island
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 remained stable from 2010 to 2011. Interestingly, during the 2011 to 2013 period, the situation changed; the
number
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 of people on the
island
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 approximately doubled,
while
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 the
number
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 of people on
cruise
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ships
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 fluctuated but remained the same
the
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 beginning of 2011 by the end of 2012. Starting in 2012, the
number
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 of
travellers
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 escalated to 3.5
million
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 by 2017.
Although
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 the
number
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 of people staying on the
island
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 remained the same
during
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from
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 2013 to 2015, the
last
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 two years were turbulent, culminating with 1.5
million
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visitors
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 as shown on our line graph. The total
number
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 of
travellers
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 to the
island
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 was 1
million
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 in 2010.
This
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 figure increased exponentially to approximately 2.75
million
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 by the end of 2014. Between 2015 and 2016, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 remained constant. The following year saw an incredible jump to 3.5
million
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visitors
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, travellers, visitors, island, cruise, ships, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 10 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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