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The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Vietnam in 1999 and 2019. Summarize the information shown by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Vietnam in 1999 and 2019. Summarize the information shown by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate how much money was spent by
majority
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the majority
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 of
householde
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households
household
 in Vietnam in two different years 1999 and 2019. Units are measured in percentages.
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, the most
expenditures
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 constituted other
goods
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 and
services
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 in 1999 and housing in 2019,
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 the least were in
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health care
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healthcare
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 segment.
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, the amount of money which was spent on transport and health care was two times lower in 2019
compare
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compared
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 to 1999.
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 the figures that show
expenditures
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 on food and other
goods
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 and
services
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 were relatively stable in both years. It can be seen that
expenditures
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 on housing accounted for 21% in 1990 and by 2019, it
inscreased
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increased
 by13% to 34%. Interestingly the figures which depict
expenditures
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 on food and other
goods
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 and
services
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 change by 3%, for food they climbed from 24% to 27%, meanwhile for other
goods
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 and
services
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 they decreased from 29% to 26%.
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, spending money on transport and health care shrank significantly, from 20 % and 6% in the first year to 10% and 3 % in the final one, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditures, goods, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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