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The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for future years.

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The line graph poses the figure of society who moved from rural to urban areas in
tree
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three
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 countries from 2000 to 2025
years
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.
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, in the following 5
years
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 communities in Iran not
moved
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move
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,
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after
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and after
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this
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 an increasing
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 of residents started sharply
movement
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moving
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 from 2005 to 2025
years
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. Afterwards, people in Russia save
rise
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the
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 movement all period.
In addition
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,
Indonasia
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Indonesia
keepa
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kept
 stabilise move than
other
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the other
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 2 countries. In
Iran
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Iran,
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 the statistics
initially
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 stated at 8
million
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.
Then
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 began to go upward to 10
million
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 in 2005, after which in line graph was a dramatic change for the better. The second in Russia
number
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 of folks was
make
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 up
about
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of about
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 15
million
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. Following
which
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this
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this
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 country was
highest
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higher
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 than others.
However
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, in 2020
Iran
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Iran's
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 people were exactly the same as Russia. The
number
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 of people in Indonesia in 2000 who were moving, was 10
million
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.
Then
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 in the later
years
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 was
silght
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a
 change and in 2020
number
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 of society got to
30 000
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30,000
 thousand. But
finally
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 from 2020 to 2025
years
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this
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 statistic
not
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has not
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 moved.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 3 times.
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