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Band 4.5

Some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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Goverment
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Government
 funding the search of
extra terrestrial
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extraterrestrial
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life
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 is welcomed by a group of
people
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while
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 others
urgue
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argue
urge
 that it will be
misuse
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a misuse
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 of public money as
their
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 is
lot
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a lot
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 of unresolved issues on earth. I personally believe
its
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it's
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 important to expand our knowledge of
life
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 outside planet
earth
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Earth
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 as it can help us with resources or technology and skills which
has
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 been scarce here at
home
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. As we expand our horizon to new
planets
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, we believe that these
planets
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 have resources of their own which we can import back
home
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 and help us. Some studies have found other
planets
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 are rich in
diamond
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diamonds
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 like Uranus which if
its
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apply
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imported back
home
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 can boost
the
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economic status. Others believe that
life
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 outside our
home
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 planet
have
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 advanced sectors
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 as technology, which can be shared with us to advance our travel, health and research sectors. These can be attributed to the sighting of unidentified flying objects which are very advanced. Some
people
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 believe that we are
consummed
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consumed
 with our own problems to the extent that using
money
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the money
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 for
space
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 study will be
misappropriation
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a misappropriation
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 of funds.
Its
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 argued that the capital we are using for
space
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 exploration would have been in better use if it was given to the healthcare system despite them having one of the largest
budget
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budgets
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. Others debate that we
dont
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don't
 have
the
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enough
man power
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manpower
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 to be used for projects
such
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 as
space
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 travel because of the few
the
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people
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 who have
understanding
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an understanding
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 of
space
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, but
this
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 can be solved
through
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 encouraging young
people
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 to become
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space
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a space
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scientist
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scientists
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. In conclusion search
of
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for
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life
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 outside planet
earth
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Earth
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 can increase our resources by importing the ones found on other
planets
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 can
also
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 increase our understanding
on
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of
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 issues
such
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technology
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as technology
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. Despite funding and manpower being a problem I believe the advantages of
space
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 exploration
outweights
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outweighs
outweigh
 its disadvantages.

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language
Improve sentence structure and clarity. For example, instead of 'wasted of public money', use 'a waste of public money'.
content
Provide more specific examples and evidence to strengthen the arguments, particularly in the points about advanced technology and potential resources.
language
Ensure proper spelling, for example, 'argue' instead of 'urgue' and 'there is' instead of 'their is'.
content
You present a clear opinion in favor of space exploration, which is important for task achievement.
content
The essay addresses both views, which is commendable in presenting a balanced argument.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented opportunities
  • extraterrestrial
  • satisfy human curiosity
  • practical benefits
  • inspiring goal
  • testament to human ambition
  • pursuit of knowledge
  • critics argue
  • imprudent
  • plague Earth
  • immediate attention
  • allocated for
  • environmental conservation
  • well-being
  • quality of life
  • balanced approach
  • advancements
  • benefits for humanity
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