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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four European countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four European countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph represents the
number
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 of
car
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theft
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thefts
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 in ( Great Britain, Sweden,
France
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 and Canada)
frim
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from
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 1990 to 1999.
Firstly
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, there were a
number
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 of
fluctuation
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 in
car
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theft
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 in European countries
such
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 as,
the
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Great Britain was a common
theft
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 who
stoled
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stole
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 a
car
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,
while
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the
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Sweden registered a
scend
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steep
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 rate of
car
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theft
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 in 1999 .
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Secondly
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France
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 saw
a
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the
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 lowest
number
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 of
theft
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 in 1990, and
France
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 and Sweden had
same
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the same
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 proportion of thrift in 1991 .
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,
France
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 and Canada reached
a
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the
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 lowest percentage of
car
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 thrift in 1999. In conclusion,
the
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car
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theft
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 in Great Britain experienced
a
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an
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 upward trend
in through
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throughout
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 the period,
while
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the
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apply
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France
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 showed a downward
number
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 of
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theft
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thefts
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at the end
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 of the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, car, theft, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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