The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activites at one social centre in melbourne, australia for the period 2000 to 2020

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of participants who are active in different activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia between the years 2000 and 2020.

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it is clear that

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most of the individuals endorsed film clubs which

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most popular over the timeframe,

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amateur dramatics

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. The most popular center for social activities is the film club which was around 65,

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there were some changes over time it remained over 60

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of 2020.

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, the same pattern is seen in martial arts which remain just under 40.

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, table tennis was the fourth most popular among the social activities which were just under 20 and remained around 20 until 2010, before surging dramatically up to under 60, in 2020.

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, in 2000, amateur dramatics was third in ranking which decreased gradually to reach approximately 8 in 2020.

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, musical performances were newly introduced in 2005 and increased gradually up to 20 in 2020, ranking fourth position.

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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

166 words

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The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activites at one social centre in melbourne, australia for the period 2000 to 2020

Many experts have noted that people in modern society do not exercise often. What is a cause and solution to this problem ?

Some people think watching TV is bad for children in every way. Others think it is good for developing children as they grow up. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, people spend more and more time away from their families. Why is this? What effect will it have on themselves and their families?

News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported?