You have discovered a lot of rubbish in a lake near where you live. In the past, the lake had always been clean. Write a letter to the local council. In the letter: · describe the type of rubbish that you saw in the lake · explain where you think the waste has come from · suggest what the council should do about the problem

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Dear
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or Madam, I want to inform
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at
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apply

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that lake where people throw lots of rubbish but if I
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about the past when I looked it was so clear but now it is not. I
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with my family to enjoy I decided to visit the lake when I reached there I saw the place was dirty,waste material like plastic bags,plastic bottles and other things spread everywhere.So I felt very uncomfortable there
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not stay there. I think when families visit
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beautiful places, they bring food and other items with them and after
that
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that,

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they do not care about cleaning so they throw all waste stuff everywhere and it seems too bad. I suggest that
council
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the council

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should put
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a dustbin

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dustbin
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dustbins

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over there and strictly
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to
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all our communities that they have to throw garbage in these bins ,
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moreover
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they should fined if anyone
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not follow the rules. I hope that you
considere
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consider
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my suggestion. Yours faithfully, Rabia.

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Start with a clear introduction that states the purpose of your letter. This helps the reader understand what the letter is about right from the beginning.
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Work on using linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more clearly. This will improve the flow of your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Try to paraphrase instead of repeating phrases too often, which can make your writing sound less varied and engaging.
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Maintain a more formal tone throughout the letter, especially in the introduction and conclusion, to align with the nature of a letter to the council.
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You have addressed the key points required in the prompt, such as describing the rubbish, its source, and suggesting solutions.
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Your heartfelt concern about the cleanliness of the lake comes through clearly, which makes your letter more persuasive.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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