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Band 4.5

A cafe near your home puts some chairs and tables on the pavement for customers. This creates a problem for you. Write a letter to the cafe manager to complain about this matter. In your letter •describe the problem; •explain how it affects you; •say what you will do if this matter is not resolved.

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Dear manager, Hi my name is Hala Abdullah ,I am writing
this
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 to inform you that since you
open
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opened
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 your cafe
its
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 has been upsetting me how the situation with chairs and the table
have
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 been .  I live in the apartment next to you and The hood is already
do
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 not have enough space for us who live here including you , and our parking spots gone because of
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 new situation . I sent you on your mobile a couple of
time
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 but it
is seems
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 that you don't want to
response
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 to me, and
this
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 is my
last
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 warning for you sir . You did not give me another option but to take
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agrasive
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aggressive
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 path which I don't like.
however
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, I am
here
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apply
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sending you
this
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 letter to inform you that
i
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 will take some serious legal action
to
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against
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this
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 situation that
have been effect
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has affected
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 all the people live here , and
i
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I
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 will call whoever
in
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 charge of
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 and let them figure it out if you don't want to remove them inside Thank
you
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you,
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 sir and good afternoon

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tone
Ensure to maintain a polite and formal tone throughout the letter. Avoid using informal language and personal attacks, as this can detract from your main points.
structure
Try to clearly separate your points in different paragraphs. Each paragraph should ideally focus on a single idea related to the problem.
content
Your effort to communicate the issue is commendable, and you clearly explain how it affects you personally, which shows engagement with the topic.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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