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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Nhi

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Nhi
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The table illustrates the distribution of money spent on three subclasses: consumable, wearable and
leisure
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 products. The data from 2002 is provided for Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey. In overview, the proportions spent in these categories were highest for Ireland and Turkey, and the subclass of food, drinks and tobacco consumes most of the savings.
According to
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 the information, Ireland and Turkey spend nearly a third of the money on consumable products, around 7% of spending - on clothing and footwear, and 2-4% on
leisure
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While
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, distribution in other countries is less than 20% for food, 5 to 9 per cent for clothing and around 2% to 3% for
leisure
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 and education. The spending distribution among countries indicates that
industry
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the industry

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 of consumables takes on average a quarter of the income.
On the other hand
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, clothing with footwear and
leisure
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 with education together commonly takes around 10% of spending.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words leisure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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