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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Nhi

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Nhi
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table chart
illustrate
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 the data
of
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on
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 public expenditures
on
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in
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 different categories in five different countries- Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden,
Turkey
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and Turkey
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- during the year
of
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2002.
Overall
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, it can be seen that all five
coutries
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countries
has
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spent
their
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 majority of
wealth
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their wealth
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 on food, drinks or tobacco,
while
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least
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the least
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 spending
were
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 on
lesuire
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leisure
 activities/
education
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 and the moderate
spend
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spending
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seen
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was
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 on clothing or
footwears
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footwear
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. In 2002, Turkey
has
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spent
most
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the most
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for
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on
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 food, drinks and tobacco
with
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 32.14% which is the highest
among
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compared to other countries. Following Turkey, Ireland has
showed
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 more than a quarter
spending
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of spending
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 on the same. Spain, Italy and
Swedan
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Sweden
also
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 observed high spending on Food, Drinks and Tobacco during the period
with18.80
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with 18.80
%, 16.36% and 15.77% respectively.
On the other hand
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, the materialistic needs and
lesuire
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leisure
/
education
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 expenditures were very small in numbers. Italy
has
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utilized
their
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apply
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9% of
money
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the money
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 for
cloths
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clothes
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 and footwear,
whereas
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 for
lesiure
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leisure
 and
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education
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education,
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 it was 3.20%.
Additionally
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,
Swedan
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Sweden
 and Spain
has
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have
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spend
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spent
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 over 3% and 1%
for
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on
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 entertainment and
education
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 orderly, at the same time they saw
rise
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a rise
the rise
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 in expenditure on garments and shoes.

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