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Some people believe that it is essential to learn a foreign language in school, while others believe that it is not necessary. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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some
persons
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people
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 think that it is important to learn different
languages
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at in
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in
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an
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 early
ages
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age
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 but others
have
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do have
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 not the same idea. Sometimes learning foreign
languages
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 can be necessary,
in
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on
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other
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the other
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 hand it may be wasting time. In
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 essay will be
disscused
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discussed
 both views,
arguments
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and arguments
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 and explaining of these opinions.
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let
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disscus
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discuss
discus
 about importance of knowing
any
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a
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 foreign
language
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.
According to
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research
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the research
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of
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by
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Psycology
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the Psycology
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 University of Praque in 2019, 78% of
people
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 who knows 2 or more
languages
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has
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have
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 more developed
brain
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brains
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 than
who
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those who
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doesn't
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don't
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 know. The result of
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 research shows that
study
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studying
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 a
language
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 improves
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the human's
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human's
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human
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 brain.
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example
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example,
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 if
person
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a person
the person
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 can speak more
languages
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 than one, is able to explain his opinion clearly compared to
people
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 who can't.
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Moreover
 there is
other
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another
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 idea that says
learning
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the learning
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 process is not essential. Why is there
such
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opinion
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an opinion
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?
Because sometimes
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Sometimes
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people
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 study unnecessary
languages
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 for their job or academic
purpose
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purposes
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 and in
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 situation process of learning equals wasting time. İnstead of studying
language
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 person can improve other skills,
whic
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which
 are needed for their speciality.
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 for IT
specialist
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specialists
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 learning programming is more important than
study
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studying
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 any
language
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such
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 as Chinese,
Japan
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Japanese
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 or others. My own opinion is more close to
first
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the first
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 idea. I think studying different
languages
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 is
good
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a good
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 thing to feed our brains.
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 process
make
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makes
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 human's vision more viser and bigger.
Also
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 with knowledge of many
languges
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languages
people
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 can find any job
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easily
easly
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easily
, because
anguage
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language
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is
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are
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required
requared
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required
from
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for
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works
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work
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 Based on
argument
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the argument
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 written in
this
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 text both
wievs
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views
 are discussed.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to enhance the logical flow of the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Try to provide a more nuanced conclusion that summarizes your main points and offers a final perspective.
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Use a wider range of vocabulary and grammar structures to convey your ideas more effectively.
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Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammar errors (e.g., 'disscuss' should be 'discuss', 'anguage' should be 'language').
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The essay introduces the topic clearly and acknowledges different perspectives.
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You provide examples to support your points, which adds depth to your arguments.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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