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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting tha main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting tha main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph provides information about the average carbon dioxide (CO2)
emissions
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 per
person
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 in four countries: the United
Kingdom
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,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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, in
this
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forty year
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 period, the rise in the average CO2
emissions
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 per
person
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 in Italy and
in
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Portugal,
along with
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 the decrease of
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figure
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 in the United
Kingdom
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 and
Sweden
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 were the most notable features. In Italy,
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figure
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 was approximately 4
tonnes
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 in 1967 and 40 years later it was witnessed to nearly double.
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, in Portugal it followed a similar path, starting at approximately 2
tonnes
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 in 1967, reaching over 5
tonnes
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 in 1997 and remained stable in 2007. In the United
Kingdom
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, as mentioned the
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 followed a downward trend, starting at approximately 11
tonnes
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 in 1967 and dropping to below 9
tonnes
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 in 2007. In
Sweden
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, despite the fact that the total CO2
emissions
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 per
person
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 increased from almost 9
tonnes
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 to over 10 in 1977, the
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 in 2007 managed to drop to below 6
tonnes
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.
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, the United
Kingdom
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 remained the country with the highest average CO2
emissions
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 per
person
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 of the four, Italy followed as the country with the second largest
figure
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 and Portugal and
Sweden
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 followed with similar measurements.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words co, emissions, person, kingdom, sweden, figure, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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