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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Some people think that the best way to improve road transport safety is to let the driver test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?’

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Certain Individuals believe that to develop safe transportation,
examination
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 of the drivers is necessary annually. I disagree with
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 statement on a
grater
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extend
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 and will provide justification in upcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
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, testing drivers can help to maintain
high
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a high
the high
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 level of driving
standard
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standards
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, as well drivers can check their ability
of driving
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to drive
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 and knowledge of traffic rules, since it is important to update oneself with the time.
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, authorities can ensure that they are
well informed
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 about road safety regulations.
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, poor visibility is a cause
for
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of
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 road accidents which can
be reduce
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 by
this
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 exam.
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,
as per
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 my opinion, it is not an effective approach as it is
time wasting
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 and costly. Since
government
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 will have to invest
lot
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 of money to arrange
test
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tests
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 every year, as it requires
to prepare
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 for the venue,
hire
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hiring
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 new staff and
plan
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schedule
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. Rather than doing
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government
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 should impose strict rules to avoid accidents. There should be a penalty
on
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for
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 breaking traffic rules
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also use
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 camera footage to get aware
about
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of
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violence
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 of regulation.
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,
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government
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the government
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 should introduce courses or awareness campaigns
by
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so
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 that people can enhance their knowledge.
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this
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,
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government
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the government
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 should utilise money
on developing
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to develop
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 roads. In conclusion, to increase
standard
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the standard
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 of driving it is
good
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a good
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 idea to test them every 12 months yet it is not
approachable
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 idea
instead
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of
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apply
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that
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the
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government
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 should invest
on
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in
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 better infrastructure and improve regulations,

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task achievement
Strengthen your thesis statement in the introduction for clarity. Your viewpoint should be clearly articulated as either agreeing or disagreeing from the start. Consider rephrasing to make it more definitive.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the flow of your paragraphs. Ensure that you use cohesive devices (like 'however', 'furthermore', etc.) to enhance connections between ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
Incorporate more specific examples to support your key arguments. For instance, citing statistics or studies related to the effectiveness of driver testing could strengthen your claims.
task achievement
While your argument against driver testing is valid, consider addressing potential counterarguments. This could enhance your essay by showing that you have considered multiple perspectives.
task achievement
You present a clear opinion throughout the essay, which is important for task achievement.
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Your points about government spending and alternative measures like penalties and awareness campaigns are relevant and demonstrate critical thinking.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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