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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to to university . what are the advantages and disadvantages of this ?

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In recent times taking a year off after schooling and before joining a university is becoming quite famous .
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 it has it come with own benefits and demerits .In my opinion demerits overweight the benefits. On the one hand, the merits of students having a 12-month break between their formal education is that they find time to assimilate knowledge about their personal interests.
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, they get enough period to decide on the future and courses which interest them in their higher education.
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 ,ample of students who graduate from school do not have any prior knowledge of the various courses the university offers and curricula they are best suited to,
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, they might make a wrong decision which affects their future.
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, challenges faced by school graduates having a twelve-month period gap as they will not be able to sit with their age pupils at the beginning of their under graduation.
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, they will face consequences as they face hefty competition when they want
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 to search for a job. As they are in line with already existing competitors.
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 , if we look into 2024 university passouts they are applying for the same market as 2023 graduates who have not yet placed in any company.
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, Having a four-season break before admitting into college and right after graduating from school has its own merits as one can find a chance to learn about personal interests and so on, but it has its challenges as competition grows. Generally speaking ,a year gap will always negatively affect their career.

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Task Achievement
Try to improve the clarity of your introduction by clearly stating the advantages and disadvantages you will discuss in your essay. This sets a clear path for the reader.
Task Achievement
Make sure to develop your arguments more fully. For example, provide more specific examples to support your points about the disadvantages of taking a gap year.
Coherence and Cohesion
Check for grammatical errors to improve the overall fluency of your writing, such as articles and prepositions (e.g., 'it has its own benefits' instead of 'it has it come with own benefits').
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to use linking words consistently to improve the flow between paragraphs and ideas. For instance, 'however' and 'on the other hand' can help in contrasting your points more effectively.
Task Achievement
You clearly identified the topic and presented a personal opinion, which is an essential part of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of your essay is logical, with a clear distinction between the advantages and disadvantages of taking a gap year.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • work experience
  • internships
  • traveling
  • life experiences
  • personal development
  • independent
  • self-reliant
  • educational progress
  • graduation timeline
  • financial burden
  • academic momentum
  • structured academic environment
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