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Band 3

Many believe that individuals can do little to improve the environment. Only government and large companies can make a real difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
environment
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 is a gift that needs a lot of nurturing .Owing to
this
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 strata of society deem that individuals can make small efforts for the betterment of
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environment
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. I,
however
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, partially adhere
with
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to
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suggested
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the suggested
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 idea
due to
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 umpteen reasons. On the
one
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 hand , there are
number
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a number
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 of reasons
how
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why
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one
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 can make little
efforts
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effort
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 to save
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the enviornment
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enviornment
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environment
. First and foremost is using garbage bins,
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 , people should not spread
littere
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litter
littered
on
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in
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 empty places
rather
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but rather
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 try to put it in
dustbin
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the dustbin
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.To
examplify
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exemplify
,
upto
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up to
 80% of waste
are
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is
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 just thrown
in
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on
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 roadsides or
empty
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an empty
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place
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places
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 in India
according to
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the
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a
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 survey conducted by WHO.
secondly
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, folks should try to plant more trees in their garden or house.which can be helpful in saving
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environment
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the environment
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 and prevent
one
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 from health issues.
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,
Government
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the Government
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 play a significant role
to nurture
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in nurturing
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environment
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the environment
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 .
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,government policies and corporate social responsibilities are critical for large-scale change as
ministry
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the ministry
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 should provide awareness among society about environmental damage and its causes. Awareness is not only
one
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 reason but encouragement plays a significant role
to make
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in making
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 people
understandble
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understand
about
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apply
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sustainability.To
exampify
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explain
,
law makers
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lawmakers
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 of India
has
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have
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 started the campaign Sawash
bharat abhiyan
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Bharat Abhiyan
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 which has improved the
environment
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 .
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, I would like to say that
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the fedral
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fedral
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federal
 government and individuals both should make equal participation to improve the
environment
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.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly outline your stance in the introduction and summarize your position in the conclusion to strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs for smoother transitions. Using linking words will help enhance coherence.
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Provide more specific examples that directly relate to your points, and ensure they are clearly explained to enhance clarity.
task achievement
You present a balanced view by discussing both individual and government roles in environmental improvement.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction effectively introduces the topic and signals your partial agreement, which is a good approach.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ecological awareness
  • sustainability
  • environmental conservation
  • government policies
  • corporate social responsibility
  • grassroots movements
  • public demand
  • informed choices
  • community initiatives
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • environmental footprint
  • waste reduction
  • advocacy
  • mobilize support
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