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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
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The three pie charts represent the changes in yearly expenditures of an unknown school in the UK
between
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 three different years.
Overall
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, it can be clearly observed that teacher salaries accounted for the largest proportion
whereas
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 that of insurance was the smallest throughout the given time frame.
However
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, it is interesting to note that the remaining three spendings were varied.
To begin
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 with, paying for lecturers accounted for the highest percentages among
other
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 four categories at 40% in 1981, at 50% in 1991 and 45% in 2001.
On the other hand
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, insurance was spent the
fewest
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 at 2% in 1981 and gradually increased to 3% and 8% in 1991 and 2001, respectively. In regards
with
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to
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 other employees
beside
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 teachers,
while
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 in 1981 and 1991 it was spent the second highest at 28% and at 22%, respectively, it was overtaken by that of the furniture and equipment with 8% more at 15% in 2001. Learning materials
such
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 as books
was
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 equally spent at 15% in 1981 as furniture and equipment and later took a turn surpassing one another in
other
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the other
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 2
year
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years
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • educational expenditure
  • financial management
  • infrastructure investment
  • evolution of costs
  • annual spending
  • strategic funding
  • capital outlay
  • operational costs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal trends
  • cost analysis
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