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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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The
two
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 maps display how
road
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 access to a city hospital had changed by 2010 compared with 2007.
Overall
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, there had not been many changes made, except
two
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 new roundabouts, a new car park and the replacement of the
bus
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 stops
by
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 a
bus
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 station. Surrounding the hospital was Ring
Road
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, which was connected to City
Road
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 by Hospital
Road
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. By 2010,
two
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 roundabouts had been added, at the junctions of Hospital
Road
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 with Ring
Road
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 and
with
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apply
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City
Road
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, respectively. There was a car park for staff and the public on the southeast side of Ring
Road
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 in 2007.
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, by 2010, it had become a staff-only car park, and a new public one had been built on the east side of
this
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road
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.
Furthermore
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, the
bus
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 stops
at
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on
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 both sides of Hospital
Road
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had
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 been replaced by a large
bus
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 station with direct access to the
two
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 roundabouts.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, road, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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