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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
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The pie chart provides key information about the proportion of
people
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 who work after graduating from the Anthropology course,
whereas
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 the table illustrates their salaries after five years of work. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that there has been an increase in the percentage of
people
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 who
had
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 full-time work.
In addition
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, there was a decrease in the percentage of
people
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 working in private companies,
while
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 a larger number had opportunities in the government sector and as freelance consultants.
According to
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 the data, the majority of
people
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 who worked full-time made up 52%,
whereas
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 the percentage of those working part-time was 15%.
Additionally
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, 12% were unemployed. In terms of salaries, 40% of freelance consultants earned more than $100,000, 50% of government sector employees earned
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 amount, and 30% of private company workers made over $100,000. Those who earned between $75,000 and $99,999 had percentages ranging from 40% to 25%, respectively

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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