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The chart below provides information about the 5 types of transportation that tourists used in a particular city between 1989 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below provides information about the 5 types of transportation that tourists used in a particular city between 1989 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart shown provides information about the 5 different types of transportation that
tourists
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 used in a particular city between 1989 and 2009.
Moreover
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,
the
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apply
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 transportation
of
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by
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 car is the most by
tourists
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 used
in
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apply
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.There
were
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60
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percent
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per cent
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tourists
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of tourists
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 used in British.
Furthermore
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,the transportation of coach that there were only 9
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percent
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per cent
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tourists
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of tourists
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in used
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use
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 in
Australian
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Australia
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 because of the fact that many
tourists
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had
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have
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a car
the car
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car
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cars
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 and they
thoght
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think
 it would
convinence
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be convenient
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.There were 45
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percent
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per cent
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tourists
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of tourists
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 used in.
Besides
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 that,there were 55
percent
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tourists
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of tourists
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 go to
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Japanese
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japanese
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Japan
 by Airplane
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due
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apply
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to
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apply
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the fact that
tourists
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go
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apply
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to
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Japanese
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japanese
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Japan
 was

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transportation
  • tourists
  • usage
  • percentage
  • chartered
  • infrastructure
  • decline
  • increase
  • preferences
  • comparison
  • significant
  • implications
  • city planners
  • stakeholders
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